An Ode

This is my first ever poem. I wrote this after I saw an interview of a girl who had lost everything in the Tsunami... Found this after a long time so I decided to post it..(as it is it was high time I posted something..If not new , then old)



Standing in the garden,
she whispers to a bee,
"O Bee, how can you be so free?"
"From flower to flower you dive,
But at dusk,
Return you do to your home , to your hive."

Standing in the garden,
she whispers to a sunflower,
"O Flower, how can you be so free?"
"From morn to twi, you follow the sun around,
But at dusk,
Return you do to your home, to your ground. "

Standing in the garden,
she whispers to a bird,
"O Bird, how can you be so free?"
"Gathering worms as a quest,
But at dusk,
Return you do to your home, to your nest. "

Standing in the garden,
she whispers to herself,
"O Thy, why can't I be so free?"
"Day by day grows this urge to know,
But at dusk,
Where is the place I have to go? "

"No home to return to,
No one to turn to."

13 comments:

  Comfortably Numb

10 July 2008 at 21:18

Now this is for everyone who thinks that the First poem cannot be good/expressive/complete...blah blah..
This poem will change your view :)

Beautiful poem. And the last two lines...

"No home to return to,
No one to turn to."

So simple yet so deep!!

Cheers!

  The Solitary Writer.

10 July 2008 at 21:41

hey first poem congo

btw very touch ...i can feel the emotions and feelings of an affected child yaar

really touching

Standing in the garden,
she whispers to a bee,
"O Bee, how can you be so free?"
"From flower to flower you dive,
But at dusk,
Return you do to your home , to your hive."
example were touching....

any way me blogrolling u

dont mind

  Rashi V

10 July 2008 at 22:02

Awww thanks guys!!! :)

  Mishra

11 July 2008 at 09:00

Sheer beauty :)

  vanilla sky

11 July 2008 at 20:03

woww! loved the rhymings!
and the analogy drawn is really awesome !

  Abhinav Viswambharan

11 July 2008 at 22:43

"No home to return to,
No one to turn to."


Touching lines indeed.

You have written the poem in a beautiful way. It is simple yet profound. :)

  anurag

14 July 2008 at 16:17

Well i m not that gr8 in poems and its analogy, but i like the thought and emotions put to it !! Nice attempt>>

www.anuragarch.blogspot.com

  Charu

18 July 2008 at 16:23

Wel..its unbelievable its your first poem..
Its beautiful..

YEah..indeed we all wish to be free..
Well written..

  The Solitary Writer.

18 July 2008 at 18:23

first poem is always gr8 isnt it

i remember the one that i wrote when i was 16 ..... :))


anyway rashi,

inviting u to join the writers lounge

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do join our group blog

do leave ur email id in that blog in the first post

we will invite u
hope to see u there

  Paritosh Rai

18 July 2008 at 18:53

what does one want after a hard day's work? lounge about in his home. and when you have no home to call your home i wonder what exactly does one look forward to throughout the day..
simple yet powerful. :)

  WeirdISgooD2

27 July 2008 at 12:20

Its a beautiful poem.

In a lighter vein though ...had i seen a bug, i wouldn't have asked it questions. I'd have squashed it :D

My favorite line, apart from the last two
" day by day grows this urge to know" ..despite everything, she's learning and living on.

  raj k

10 September 2008 at 23:33

well after reading this poem two things which i can makeout
1stly.the real and innocent feelings of an affected child
2ndly the beautiful interperation of the true feelings by the poet.
actually i'm not a great poem reader but really liked this poem and the whole credit goes to rashi for creating such a wonderful creation ...

  Tan

6 March 2009 at 01:08

Thanks for sharing ... would have loved to read it earlier ... a few words can be changed ... but then, this is your first ever!!

Thanks again for continuing to write ... for this is how I know you :)