After hours

He: We lost 4-1. 4-1!! I'm not going to work tomorrow. 

She: Haha! Don't be stupid now. I bet they made an earnest effort but well you guys do suck.

He: Yeah. That's what I'll have to listen to all day tomorrow. Maybe all week. I work in an office filled with Gunners and Blues.

She: Come on. Its ok. Just their 2nd defeat. They'll come back.

He: How was your day? Didn't you have their HR meeting today?

She: Yes. That was fun. HR came up with a fun activity for a change.

He: Not all HRs are bad. I'm pretty good at it.

She: I bet, darling. So, today our team had to sit down and think of an object that we can identify with the other person.

He: That is interesting. You were?

She: Maggi Noodles...

He: Haha.. Seriously? 

She: Dependable and Reliable. Low maintenance.

He: Low maintenance? Do they know you?

She: Well, not as well as you do!

He: Smart.

She: You would say I'm..?

He: Hmmmm... (a long pause)

She: I'm waiting... 

He: A chemically reactive substance.

She: Excuse me..

He: Yeah. The unstable chemical element. That has many layers. Many stages before it finally reaches stability. What it touches doesn't remain itself. It changes. Maybe good. Maybe bad. But it changes. Like you changed me for life. You've scarred me. *smirk*

She: In a good way?

He: Maybe.

She: Sly. It is ok to compliment once in a while.

He: (yawn) yeah. I know.

She: I think you should sleep now. Gnite. See you tomorrow? 

He: Yes. Same time. Same place. Sleep well.

Attempted for 3WW: (Words were Earnest, Reactive, Layers)



26 March 2009 at 17:05

Nice little snapshot - soap opera style, perhaps!

  Fledgling Poet

26 March 2009 at 18:36

I enjoyed portrayed very well the intimacy of these two people as they playfully interact.

  Pretty Me!!

26 March 2009 at 19:18

i really loved this !! have had so amny such candid conversations ...


26 March 2009 at 19:26

You've got a good handle on dialogue, which is hard to do. It's candid and doesn't feel forced.


26 March 2009 at 20:49

Maggi noodles? At first I thought that was the character's name. Which actually I quite like. Might use that some time.


26 March 2009 at 21:54

luvd it! simple dialogues nd da flow was amazing! :)


26 March 2009 at 23:17

loved it! :)


just sad abt the 4-1 part thats all!


27 March 2009 at 06:40

Nice scene. Real life.


27 March 2009 at 12:01

they were sleeping in different rooms?


27 March 2009 at 14:50



27 March 2009 at 23:22

Natural sounding dialog. Interesting words and exchange. Nice!

  gautami tripathy

28 March 2009 at 05:58

Interesting exchange!

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