This is my first ever poem. I wrote this after I saw an interview of a girl who had lost everything in the Tsunami... Found this after a long time so I decided to post it..(as it is it was high time I posted something..If not new , then old)
Standing in the garden,
she whispers to a bee,
"O Bee, how can you be so free?"
"From flower to flower you dive,
But at dusk,
Return you do to your home , to your hive."
Standing in the garden,
she whispers to a sunflower,
"O Flower, how can you be so free?"
"From morn to twi, you follow the sun around,
But at dusk,
Return you do to your home, to your ground. "
Standing in the garden,
she whispers to a bird,
"O Bird, how can you be so free?"
"Gathering worms as a quest,
But at dusk,
Return you do to your home, to your nest. "
Standing in the garden,
she whispers to herself,
"O Thy, why can't I be so free?"
"Day by day grows this urge to know,
But at dusk,
Where is the place I have to go? "
"No home to return to,
No one to turn to."
Sunday Stealing
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13 comments:
10 July 2008 at 21:18
Now this is for everyone who thinks that the First poem cannot be good/expressive/complete...blah blah..
This poem will change your view :)
Beautiful poem. And the last two lines...
"No home to return to,
No one to turn to."
So simple yet so deep!!
Cheers!
10 July 2008 at 21:41
hey first poem congo
btw very touch ...i can feel the emotions and feelings of an affected child yaar
really touching
Standing in the garden,
she whispers to a bee,
"O Bee, how can you be so free?"
"From flower to flower you dive,
But at dusk,
Return you do to your home , to your hive."
example were touching....
any way me blogrolling u
dont mind
10 July 2008 at 22:02
Awww thanks guys!!! :)
11 July 2008 at 09:00
Sheer beauty :)
11 July 2008 at 20:03
woww! loved the rhymings!
and the analogy drawn is really awesome !
11 July 2008 at 22:43
"No home to return to,
No one to turn to."
Touching lines indeed.
You have written the poem in a beautiful way. It is simple yet profound. :)
14 July 2008 at 16:17
Well i m not that gr8 in poems and its analogy, but i like the thought and emotions put to it !! Nice attempt>>
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18 July 2008 at 16:23
Wel..its unbelievable its your first poem..
Its beautiful..
YEah..indeed we all wish to be free..
Well written..
18 July 2008 at 18:23
first poem is always gr8 isnt it
i remember the one that i wrote when i was 16 ..... :))
anyway rashi,
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18 July 2008 at 18:53
what does one want after a hard day's work? lounge about in his home. and when you have no home to call your home i wonder what exactly does one look forward to throughout the day..
simple yet powerful. :)
27 July 2008 at 12:20
Its a beautiful poem.
In a lighter vein though ...had i seen a bug, i wouldn't have asked it questions. I'd have squashed it :D
My favorite line, apart from the last two
" day by day grows this urge to know" ..despite everything, she's learning and living on.
10 September 2008 at 23:33
well after reading this poem two things which i can makeout
1stly.the real and innocent feelings of an affected child
2ndly the beautiful interperation of the true feelings by the poet.
actually i'm not a great poem reader but really liked this poem and the whole credit goes to rashi for creating such a wonderful creation ...
6 March 2009 at 01:08
Thanks for sharing ... would have loved to read it earlier ... a few words can be changed ... but then, this is your first ever!!
Thanks again for continuing to write ... for this is how I know you :)
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