The prompt for the week is FRIENDSHIP at Acrostic Only.
It is impossible to say all about this in just 10 lines. But I have tried to capture the essence of it in first poem.
The second one is in a dedication to a very dear friend of mine. To the sloth bear!
Forever seems a time too little. In
Retrospect, I wonder
If I completely understand
Everything that transpired, then and now.
Never ending love, undying
Devotion, unrelenting trust
Soothing advice, strong shoulders.
Happiness or sorrow, never ever was
I alone. All along, you tagged.
Perish with me, only shall the feeling of "us".
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"Forgive me, will you?"
Repeated he, for the 4th time.
I pretended never to have heard
Echoes of the remorse.
Never ever has a slap been so hard.
Dead inside, the feelings strong.
"Stop," I say to him.
"Have you realised
I don't ever want to think, ever
Pretend it never happened?"
15 comments:
5 April 2009 at 17:04
i told u i loved the first poem! its just lovely. u did somethin i couldn't do in 10 lines. mine is 4 times that length! :D
just beautiful... full marks for u!
5 April 2009 at 17:46
I loved the first poem, wow! leo said the same thing, i am not surprised!
brevity - beauty rash!
what else can I say :)
Its the feel that keeps us together. i love ur words.
5 April 2009 at 21:55
really beautiful one !! loved the first one though the second one was amusing !!
5 April 2009 at 23:04
Friendship is a wonderful gift to humankind and ones should be so thankful if they are blessed with such a gift.
6 April 2009 at 00:52
Heartfelt!! No wonder you have good friends :) First one was fairly good but the second one was amazing to read :)
6 April 2009 at 07:40
DO u want to do frandship with me??
6 April 2009 at 13:07
wow... amazing one mate... loved the first one so much... so much depth...
:)
take care da... talk later... cheers...
6 April 2009 at 13:41
It's difficult to summarize friendship especially in a short acrostic. You have accomplished it in 2 very commendable and contrasting ways! Both are excellent! The first one is straight and simple while the second one makes you think... Loved them both!
6 April 2009 at 13:41
Two different types of friendship.
I relate to both of the, but I love the first one better.
Very good Rashi.
6 April 2009 at 21:55
you make me smile.
esp the 1st one.
i cant define the smile.
but yea i look weird :D
7 April 2009 at 14:15
Remarkable compositions... Loved 'em.
Friendship is wonderful; friendship, is divine.
It grows a whole lot better with time, like ye lode wine...
Keep writing. Spread the voice.
Peace. Have a nice day.
7 April 2009 at 15:36
Loved both of them, the second one is pretty innovative style..
keep it up!!
7 April 2009 at 15:38
A deep and thoughtful response. Excellent.
10 April 2009 at 16:32
Both the shades of friendship are very nicely penned but to me the second one is slightly more dear....keep writing!!
11 April 2009 at 07:11
Very impressive.
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